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2015年6月六級
2015年6月六級
My opinion on certificate craze
The growing tendency among college students to get all kinds of certificates has now evolved into a craze. Just randomly ask a student what he or she is busily engaged in doing, quite possibly, you would get the answer that he or she is preparing for a certificate of some kind. So, why’s the craze?
The reason behind this phenomenon is common — the enormous pressure of finding a job. Faced with a harsh job market, most students have no choice but to seek more certificates to parlay their qualifications. Another factor is that diploma and certificates still weighs heavily in terms of signifying one’s ability. For the sake of increasing their odds of landing a better job, the students are compelled to run from one exam to another。
Though I have an open mind toward the craze on certificates, I suggest that students should be more rational when it comes to certificates, since they do not necessarily tell their ability. Instead, they should be more involved in learning and capability boosting, thus, opportunities would come quite naturally。
文章點評：
這是一篇“中等偏上”的學(xué)生作文。 本文先對學(xué)生的考證熱進行簡介，引出全篇;接著分析這一現(xiàn)象背后的原因;整體看思路清晰，邏輯嚴(yán)密，行文流暢，句式多變，用語較為地道。
本篇亮點表達：
The growing tendency … has now evolved into…
be busily engaged in doing
The reason behind…
harsh job market
have no choice but to…
parlay their qualifications
sth. weighs heavily in terms of…
increasing one’s odds of…
be involved in doing …
be compelled to do…
have an open mind toward…
capability boosting
本文有待提高之處：
1. 文章結(jié)構(gòu)上，能看得出該同學(xué)試圖采用議論文的“三段式”(提出問題、分析問題、解決問題)。邏輯嚴(yán)謹(jǐn)，論證嚴(yán)密;句式表達靈活，用語較為地道。
2. 微觀語言點方面，有個主謂一致的`方面的錯誤(diploma and certificates still weighs heavily);有些語句稍顯啰嗦，比quite possibly, you would get the answer that… 大可簡化成you’d most likely be told that… 更好，意思沒有絲毫減損，表達力反而增強許多;另外某些用語多重復(fù)，比如job多次出現(xiàn);為了避免此類現(xiàn)象，文中的the enormous pressure of finding a job 不妨改為 the enormous pressure of getting employed。
從整體看，本篇文章不錯，值得參考借鑒，不過用于方面還有待提高。
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Certificate craze
Recently the phenomenon of certificate craze has become a big concern of the public. It is also a new craze in the university, which seems like a routine activity on campus, for certificates do play a vital role when students look for a decent job。
Admittedly, there are different purposes behind this phenomenon. Some people aim at certificates because of the employment pressure. With the admission expansion of colleges, a great many graduates have to face the fierce competition in the job market. So it is the certificates that can make them more competitive. However, some others consider all the diploma and certificates important standards by which a person’s ability can be measured. They spare no effort to get the certificates for the sole purpose of proving that they are qualified in a certain field. Moreover, there are those who just want to enrich their life by preparing for the certificates because they really enjoy their progress。
From my point of view, we should be more rational when it comes to certificates, since certificates do not necessarily prove one’s ability. Being crazy in getting certifications blindly is nothing but wasting time. To conclude, we should focus on improving our ability but not merely getting a certificate。
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